Paret 1 "Executive Overview"

We have undertaken the study of "Jusen" problem. It is a problem of the collapse of "bubble economy" and millions of bad loans.

To think the resolving of this problem is very important for us. Because this problem last long time unsolved, Japanese economy can not recover from "Heisei Hukyou". It is even dangerous, because people are emotionally involved with a "quick way to make a back" which means that if there are no measures, people will invest without feature vision. It made wild invest again. People are easily think they can make a lot of money without anything by investment.

After the Plaza agreement the Yen became very strong and the credit liberalization, Japanese economy turned into the "Bubble Economy". In this situation, many prople thought that "the stock market in Japan would rese forever". So people bollowed a lot of money from bank and "Jusen". And invest in Japanese and international real estate and secrets. But they could only see mere paper or fantasy money. For example, there is a real estate thich could be sold $550,000 before the collapse of "bubble economy", but after the collapse of "bubble economy" it was sold only $100,000. So they only made effort to get large amount of debt.

Now we will discuss about some cause of this problem and our resolving of this problem.

1. A discussion why did the Japanese invest so much and so quickly in international real estate.
2. A discussion of the question that " was the responsibility for such wild investment created by individuals or was it more the "climate of opinion" at the time before he Japanese bubble enonomy burst.
3. A comparsion of the monetary depression between Japan and U.S. To understand about the measure which U.S used when they were in depression, it will help us to think the resolving of this problem.
4. Who, if anyone, is responsibily for this problem.
5. In the end of this report, threr are our resolution of this research and discussion ans our resolving.

"Hesei Hukyou"(this long and big depression) is biggest depression since the end of World War. Japanese economy has dveloped very quickly and very strongly since World War. And there were no critical depression so Japan had no time to look the wrong part of Japanese economy systems. Now it's the best time to check the systems. Its is best way to develop the economy and aproach to perfect economic system.

Grammatical corrections and comments

Suggested Correction	Short grammatical or logical explanation
Part 1 "Executive Overview" We have undertaken the study of the "Jusen" problem. It is a problem of the collapse of the "bubble economy" and millions of bad loans.	** Use MS-Word "spell-check" to correct spellings in English "part" and not "paret" ** "Jusen" problem" and "bubble economy " are definite things..needs "the"
We think the resolving of this problem is very important for us. Because this problem lasted a long time, unsolved, the Japanese economy can not recover from the "Heisei Hukyou". It is even dangerous, because people are emotionally involved with a "quick way to make a buck" which means that if there are no measures, people will invest without thinking about the future. Wild investment may start again. People easily think they can make a lot of money without any risk by investment.	** "To think ...", your original sentence had no Subject. "We" becomes the subject. ** "last long time unsolved" is not a correct "verb"..lasted is correct and shows the past tense. Also, "unsolved" needs a ",(comma)". "Japanese economy" is a definite thing..needs "the".. ** When you introduce a pure Japanese expression such as "Heisei Hukyou", you need to explain its meaning in English otherwise no one knows what you are writing about.. ** "buck" meaning Dollar and not "back".. **"thinking about the future" is better usage of English. **" It made wild invest again" is not a correct English sentence...although, I believe your meaning is clear. The sentence has been changed as shown which means the same thing. ** People easily think...you do not need "are" ** In the sentence beginning "People easily think .....", you should change "without anything by investment" to without any risk by investment". "without anything" doesn't really say anything..."without any risk" is very clear. There is "risk"...a chance of failure but people often don't think about this.
After the Plaza agreement and the credit liberalization, the Yen became very strong. The Japanese economy turned into the "Bubble Economy". In this situation, many people thought that "the stock market in Japan would rise forever". So people borrowed a lot of money from banks and "Jusen". They invested in Japanese and international real estate and secrets. But they could only see mere paper or fantasy money. For example, there was a real estate which was sold for $550,000 before the collapse of the "bubble economy", but after the collapse of the "bubble economy" it was sold for only $100,000. So all of their investment efforts only resulted in a large amount of debt	** the Yen became strong because of the 2 reasons in your first sentence. This sentence has been restructured. You should state the reasons and then the result ** Use the MS-WORD spell-check to look for mis-spellings..."people" not prople.."rise" not "rese; "borrowed" not bollowed" ** banks is plural ** Do not start sentences with "And".."And invest" is weak...use "They invest" ** "real estate" was sold..past tense.."was sold for" requires "for" **" So they only made effort to get large amount of debt." is not a clear sentence, "only made effort" at What?..."investment efforts, isn't it. The sentence has been re-structured without changing your meaning.
Now we will discuss about some causes of this problem and our resolving of this problem. Why did the Japanese invest so much and so quickly in international real estate. " Was the responsibility for such wild investment created by individuals or was it more the "climate of opinion" at the time before the Japanese bubble economy burst. We will compare the monetary depression between Japan and the U.S. If we understand about the measures which the U.S used when they were in a depression, it will help us to think about the resolving of this problem. Who, if anyone, is responsible for this problem. At the end of this report, we will discuss our research results and resolutions.	** "causes" is plural because there are more than one cause. ** You do not need to say "We will discuss" in each of your points because you said you will disucss already. Simplify and do not repeat!!!! ** Use MS-WORD spellcheck..You had quite a few mis-spelling..."economy" and not "enonomy"; "comparison" and not "comparsion"; "responsible" and not "responsibily ** "To understand" contains no subject..Only in very rare situations would you use the infinitive form "To Go" "To See" etc. to begin a sentence. ** "At the end..." is better than "In the end.." ** Your original sentence "threr are our resolution of this research and discussion ans our resolving" is not a clear English sentence....although your actual meaning is understandable, it is not correct. This sentence has been changed...and simplified.
"Hesei Hukyou"(this long and big depression) is the biggest depression since the end of the World War. The Japanese economy has developed very quickly and very strongly since the World War. There was no critical depression so Japan had no time to look at the wrong part of the Japanese economic system.. Now it's the best time to check the systems. Its is best way to develop the economy and approach to a perfect economic system.	** You did a good job of defining "Hesei Hukyou" for the non-Japanese reader. ** Look at the usage of the definite article "the"..You must use "the" when referring to a definite thing (a real concrete thing you can touch or a definite concept") ** MS-WORD spellcheck..mis-spellings "developed" and not "dveloped"; 'approach" and not "aproach'. ** "And there were no critical depression"...do not start a sentence with "And"..also "depression", as used, is singular..so "was" and not "were" ** "to look the wrong part" is incorrect...usually "to look at the wrong part"...In English, one says "He looked at...She is looking at"...you need the article "at"... ** "economic system" is singular...not economy systems... ** You need "a" in last sentence since you are talking about some kind of "indefinite" future "hoped for" kind of system.

The following questions and comments should help you to continue and complete your report. If you wish to discuss any of these questions with the instructor, please contact him by e-mail. In addition to the questions listed here, you can, of course, think of your questions to complete you work.

If you use an article from a magazine, newspaper or online (Internet) source, you need to identify where that source came from. We will talk more about "sources of information" in class meetings.

What is "Heisei Hukyou". You need to explain, in English, what this term means. Don't forget, this is an international document. You cannot assume that the reader of this report will understand what a Japanese term means.

Is the Japanese government making any rules so that a situation like Jusen will not happen again in the future? Do you think that a Jusen problem will happen again in Japan?

The Japanese invested quite wildly in Hawaii. Can you find "concrete examples" (real examples) of situations where Japanese investors "lost their shirts" (losts their shirts means lost all of their money). Try and find out how the original investors in an Hawaiian property were able to get many simple Japanese citizens to invest their money in this property....because, in many cases, it was small people who invested a lot of money in bad property who lost their money.

What punishment, if any, should be given to the wild speculators in property in Japan and overseas? Is "wild speculation" a crime? If it isn't a crime, should it be a crime? Or, should individuals have the right to "lose their shirts"?

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